【習(xí)作要求】

　　請(qǐng)以My….為題寫(xiě)一篇短文。要求：有時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、人物，字?jǐn)?shù)不少于80個(gè)單詞。

　　【學(xué)生習(xí)作】

　　My Mother's Birthday

　　My mother is busy. She always busy works. (1) She often forgets her birthday.

　　Last Sunday was my mother's birthday. I invited several friends to have a birthday party for her.

　　It was five o'clock. Everything was ready. The candles were on the cake. When my mother came back to home (2), she was very surprise (3). She asked, "Whose birthday is it today?" We said, "Happy birthday to you!" She was very happy. At that time Lily gave my mother a nice present and said, "I hope you will like it" " Thank you. Can I open it now?" My mother asked.

　　"Certainly." Lily said. "Oh, it's a toy panda. How (4) a beautiful panda!" my mother said.

　　Meimei asked us, "Would you like singing?"(5) "Yes, we would love."(6) We said. We all sang with my mother.

　　That night my mother sang and danced like a little girl. She looked more (7) younger than before. （1）把a(bǔ)lways busy works改為 is always busy working，因?yàn)閎usy是形容詞作表語(yǔ)，"忙于做某事"應(yīng)該用be busy doing形式來(lái)表示。

　　（2）要把to去掉。 home在此句中是副詞，不需要加to。

　?。?）本句surprise在系動(dòng)詞之后，要把surprise改成 surprised。 surprise具有名詞、動(dòng)詞詞性，其形容詞有兩個(gè)，他們分別是 surprised 和surprising，其中前者多用來(lái)指人，后者多用來(lái)指事。

　?。?）把how改成 what。在感嘆句中how是用來(lái)修飾形容詞或副詞的，而what是用來(lái)修飾名詞的。名詞前可以有其他定語(yǔ)，單數(shù)可數(shù)名詞前記住要加上 a或 an。

　?。?）把singing改成to sing some songs,　 Would you like…后接動(dòng)詞時(shí)要加to。

　?。?）在love后面加上to。對(duì) "Would you like …?"問(wèn)句的肯定回答應(yīng)為would like (love) 后加 to，因?yàn)檫@是口語(yǔ)中動(dòng)詞不定式的省略，也就是說(shuō)to后面的動(dòng)詞短語(yǔ)省略了。

　?。?）把more改成much，因?yàn)閙ore不能用來(lái)修飾比較級(jí)。能夠用來(lái)修飾比較級(jí)的有：a little, a bit, much, rather，far和even等。

　　【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】

　　本文的小作者開(kāi)篇就寫(xiě)出母親的繁忙，為母親忘了自己的生日和自己為她準(zhǔn)備生日晚會(huì)做了鋪墊，同時(shí)也教育了那些為了自己過(guò)生日講究排場(chǎng)的同學(xué)，這也是本文的成功之處。另外小作者能夠把學(xué)過(guò)的詞匯、語(yǔ)法靈活地運(yùn)用到本文中去，這也是值得我們學(xué)習(xí)的，不過(guò)還需要在個(gè)別詞語(yǔ)用法上多下功夫。