Dream

　　Used to be my fantasyAnd nowIs my goalIt may not be greatBut it's my goal in life.No dreamWhere to targetDreamIs not a Bobbi dollIt's my hope.No dreamWhere hopeDreamIs no longer a fiction idealHas transformed into the power of my lifeNo dreamHow to power

　　修改后：

　　Dream

　　Used to be my fantasy

　　But now

　　Is what I want to be

　　It may not be great

　　But it's my goal as sure as fate

　　No dreams

　　What to target

　　Dream

　　Is not a barbie doll

　　It's what I want to do at all

　　No dreams

　　Where the hope is

　　Dream

　　Is no longer a fiction ideal

　　Has been transformed into the power of my life

　　No dreams

　　How to get strength

　　修改老師：

　　Andy老師

　　修改意見：

　　英文的詩歌體裁，需要押韻，言簡，但神需在！和中文詩歌不同，建議多閱讀一些英文詩歌，然后再進行創(chuàng)作~

　　初一:思靈