Jasper makeup into a tree falling 10000 green silk sash.spring.A word that contains life,at this time. bouquets of flowers and piles of brocades .Give a person a kind of good feeling 。 Spring is the starter for a year as dawn is for a day.Yeah！Spring morning breathe fresh air ,Looking at the beautiful scenery outside the window .all let peopie become enlightened at once，refreshed . Every spring .Roadside wild flowers ,Rose in the yard ，Peony in the field ...all Stood in full bloom . I like spring.Like the eagle cannot do without the sky . I ardently love spring.Like a child's love for his mother's arms.I Often think of spring can come earlier .merely A little impossible. Oho！spring.How beautiful you are.Let me think of you all the time .Let me look forward to you every moment . spring!A colorful season .

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　　Spring is a word that contains life. Spring is the start for a year as dawn is for a day. In spring morning, I can breathe the fresh air. And then I look at the beautiful scenery outside the window which refresh me at once. Every spring, flowers along the roadside, roses in the yard, peony in the field and all the flowers are standing in full bloom. What a colorful season! I like spring, like a child's love for his mother's arms. How beautiful spring is. Let me hug you in my arms.

　　修改老師：Crystal 老師

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