Dear Emily: I have a piece of good information to tell you.Our school Poets Cociety will hold a metting of poetry appreciation at the school hall.I'd like to invite you to come to this meeting .I know you like potery very much.I think this is a good chance for you,Poetry appreciation meeting is valuable. It can give us some knowledges. I believe a lot of students will take part in the meeting this saturday afternoon.We can learn from each other in this meeting.Would you like to come to meeting？I do hope you are able to come.I think you will be very happy when we see each other. yours, Li hua

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　　Dear Emily,

　　I have a piece of good news to tell you. Our school Poets' Club will hold a poem appreciation meeting at the school hall. I'd like to invite you to come with me. I know you like poems very much. I think this is a good chance for you. Poem appreciation meeting is valuable from which we can learn more knowledge. I believe a lot of students will take part in the meeting this Saturday afternoon. We can learn from each other. Would you like to come? I do hope you can come. I think you will be very happy when we meet each other. Yours, Li hua

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