漫畫描繪了大街上一個小孩子踩到西瓜皮摔了一跤，小孩子坐在地上迷?？粗謩e代表家庭、學校、社會的三個人——他們關切而又警惕地說：“出事了吧！”這樣一幅場景，作為一個孩子，看了這幅漫畫自然認同地笑了：家庭、學校、社會常常給予現(xiàn)在的獨生子女們過多、過分的關心和夸大、不切實際的、不必要的教育與指責。

The cartoon depicts a child in the street stepping on the watermelon skin and falling. The child sits on the ground confused and looks at the three people who represent the family, school and society respectively. They say with concern and vigilance, "something happened!" Such a scene, as a child, naturally laughs with approval after reading this cartoon: the family, school and society often give too much, too much concern and exaggeration, unrealistic and unnecessary education and criticism to the only child now.

現(xiàn)在大多數(shù)家庭只有一個孩子，兩個家長甚至祖父母輩關注、教育著一個獨苗，除了溺愛問題、孩子交往能力問題、孩子自我心理問題，還導致了漫畫中過分、夸大的教育問題。僅僅摔了一跤，或者生活中出現(xiàn)的小磕小碰和一些小挫折，三方面的教育者便以“不聽老人言”的說教者姿態(tài)圍住孩子，孩子既失去了自己反省錯誤、總結教訓的機會，也失去了獨立地、勇敢地自己爬起來的機會。

At present, most families only have one child. Two parents or even grandparents pay attention to and educate a single child. In addition to the problem of doting, the problem of children's communication ability, the problem of children's self psychology, it also leads to excessive and exaggerated education problems in comics. Only a fall, or a small bump and some small setbacks in life, the educators in three aspects surround the children with the preacher attitude of "not listening to the old man's words". The children not only lose the opportunity to reflect on their mistakes, summarize their lessons, but also lose the opportunity to stand up independently and bravely.

有一個熟悉的報道，美國的小孩子在玩耍時不慎摔倒，孩子痛得齜牙咧嘴，忍不住哭起來，高大的父親站在一邊，微笑著鼓勵兒子自己爬起來，孩子于是含著淚花爬起來。而一位中國父親在對待類似的事情時，都會大聲地喝斥孩子不聽話到處亂跑，“出事了吧！”然后抱起孩子。

There is a familiar report that children in the United States stumble when they are playing. The children show their teeth and can't help crying. The tall father stands aside and encourages his son to get up with a smile. The child then gets up with tears. When a Chinese father treats similar things, he will loudly scold his children for not obeying and running around, "what happened!" Then pick up the baby.

日本的經(jīng)濟起飛重要的一點是靠教育、培養(yǎng)人才。中國的教育同樣提出了人才強國的戰(zhàn)略。近年來，中國高度關注教育問題，大付出大投入我國教育。然而這則漫畫表現(xiàn)的問題給我們敲響了警鐘：同樣是關注教育，我們的“關注”是否存在問題？

Japan's economic take-off depends on education and training of talents. China's education also puts forward the strategy of strengthening the country with talents. In recent years, China has paid great attention to education and invested a lot in it. However, the problem of the cartoon performance gives us a wake-up call: it is also concerned about education. Is there any problem in our "concern"?

教育者過多過分的關注、不必要的指責讓孩子少了磨礪鍛煉的機會，少了培養(yǎng)自己處理問題能力的機會，少了獨立戰(zhàn)勝挫折的機會。這必然會導致畸形的人才和人格的不健全。所謂“窮人的孩子早當家”，就是窮人的孩子有更多的鍛煉自己的機會?！案袆又袊宋铩焙閼?zhàn)輝正是靠自己打拼磨礪才走出自己的人生之路，他必然比富人家孩子和“關注”下孩子更見人的品性。

The excessive attention and unnecessary accusations of educators have reduced the opportunities for children to hone and exercise, to develop their ability to deal with problems, and to overcome setbacks independently. This will inevitably lead to the deformity of talent and personality. The so-called "children of the poor are in charge early", that is, children of the poor have more opportunities to exercise themselves. Hong Zhanhui, who is "touched by Chinese characters", is just going out of his life by his own hard work. He must be more sensible than the children of rich families and the children under "concern".

中國富裕起來了，中國這個“富人家”的孩子該怎樣教育？

China has become rich. How to educate the children of the "rich family"?

不禁要問：誰出事了？孩子？教育？

Can't help but ask: who happened? Children? Education?

【亮點透析】

[highlights dialysis]

基礎等級切合題意

Basic level is suitable for the topic

文章對漫畫的主題把握十分準確，通過細致觀察，提煉出主題——家庭、學校、社會常常給予現(xiàn)在的獨生子女們過多、過分的關心和夸大、不切實際的、不必要的教育與指責。

This paper holds the theme of comics very accurately. Through careful observation, the theme - family, school and society often give too much, too much concern and exaggeration, unrealistic and unnecessary education and criticism to the only child now.

內(nèi)容充實文章圍繞主題選擇素材，中國、美國、日本以及洪戰(zhàn)輝等事例的運用充實了內(nèi)容。

Content enrichment the article selects materials around the theme, and the use of examples such as China, the United States, Japan and Hong Zhanhui enriches the content.

發(fā)展等級深刻

Profound development level

透過現(xiàn)象深入本質(zhì)

Go deep into the essence through the phenomenon

漫畫作文難在透過畫面看到其中的生活道理或哲理，本文做得很好。并且能結合學校、家庭、社會三方面辯證地看問題，很深刻。

It's hard to see the truth of life or philosophy in cartoon composition through the picture. This paper does well. And can combine school, family, society to see the problem dialectically, very deep.

現(xiàn)場評分：內(nèi)容20分+表達19分+發(fā)展19分=58分

On site score: content 20 points + expression 19 points + development 19 points = 58 points