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雅思寫(xiě)作提升之道根本在思維與邏輯而非語(yǔ)言

話題：Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

常見(jiàn)的雅思寫(xiě)作思路

你可能想到的是，“不同意(少了一些語(yǔ)言，生活不會(huì)變?nèi)菀仔?”，因?yàn)樯倭艘恍┱Z(yǔ)言，“部分民族文化就會(huì)消失”。這個(gè)點(diǎn)是存在問(wèn)題的，因?yàn)闆](méi)有答題?！吧倭艘恍┱Z(yǔ)言，部分民族文化就會(huì)消失”，和“生活不會(huì)變?nèi)菀住庇惺裁绰?lián)系呢?感覺(jué)是2個(gè)無(wú)關(guān)的句子。

這個(gè)答案會(huì)導(dǎo)致什么樣的問(wèn)題呢?評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)Task Response沒(méi)有達(dá)到。有什么辦法補(bǔ)救呢?(想想民族文化的部分消失和生活不會(huì)變簡(jiǎn)單有什么聯(lián)系)

可以考慮的答案是：少了文化特色，旅游就少了，旅游帶來(lái)的經(jīng)濟(jì)增長(zhǎng)就少了，錢(qián)少了自然生活就變難了。

那這是一個(gè)好的答案嗎?梳理一下以上的推理，就可以推出來(lái)：

語(yǔ)言的消失-民族文化的部分消失-旅游較少了-旅游帶來(lái)的經(jīng)濟(jì)增長(zhǎng)就減少了-錢(qián)少了生活就困難了。

推理越長(zhǎng)，就可以湊到越多的字?jǐn)?shù)?

請(qǐng)盡早摒棄這樣的想法。

我們來(lái)這樣思考一下：

①某種語(yǔ)言的消失，能導(dǎo)致這個(gè)民族的文化有多大部分消失?②這部分民族文化的消失，能導(dǎo)致旅游減少多少?(只有一點(diǎn)點(diǎn))③旅游減少了，對(duì)當(dāng)?shù)亟?jīng)濟(jì)的影響有多大?只要不是旅游國(guó)家或者旅游城市，影響就很小。那又有多少個(gè)主要靠旅游發(fā)展的國(guó)家和城市呢?所占比例非常小!

上面那些影響的大小是怎么估算出來(lái)的?通過(guò)日常的知識(shí)積累(平時(shí)一定要多接收信息，多思考)。一個(gè)推出另一個(gè)，但是推出可能性都不是100%，那么第一個(gè)推到最后一個(gè)，可能性是多大呢?可能性會(huì)隨著中間層級(jí)的數(shù)量的增加而減小。其實(shí)每次往前推，可能性都會(huì)變小，所以不要把推理做“長(zhǎng)”了。

綜上，這是一個(gè)不好的雅思寫(xiě)作論證。

其實(shí)我們?cè)诖痤}的時(shí)候，一般會(huì)想到很多相關(guān)的信息,而不是一開(kāi)始就想到最可靠的信息。然后，我們應(yīng)該去斟酌并篩選出強(qiáng)的論證，(丟掉弱的論證)。

回到題目，有什么更好的答案呢?

考慮如下論證：

1. 每種語(yǔ)言有自己的發(fā)音特點(diǎn)，和當(dāng)?shù)厝说纳硖卣飨喾Q。換句話說(shuō)，當(dāng)部分語(yǔ)言消失時(shí)，部分人就要學(xué)習(xí)和自己生理結(jié)構(gòu)不相稱的語(yǔ)言，生活變難(比如，硬要日本人說(shuō)英語(yǔ))。

2. 一門(mén)獨(dú)立的語(yǔ)言，包含很多表達(dá)當(dāng)?shù)厝颂攸c(diǎn)(感情，性格，思考方式等)的詞和表達(dá)方式(想想那些只有當(dāng)?shù)厝寺?tīng)得懂的字眼);統(tǒng)一化的語(yǔ)言常常沒(méi)有這么精細(xì)。這樣，當(dāng)部分語(yǔ)言消失時(shí)，人們想表達(dá)的某些感情和個(gè)性就無(wú)法表達(dá)了，生活變難。

在雅思寫(xiě)作中，高大上的分論點(diǎn)是得分的關(guān)鍵嗎?還是普通的觀點(diǎn)配上優(yōu)秀的語(yǔ)言?

這就是典型的語(yǔ)言重于思維。

如果我漢語(yǔ)不好，就無(wú)法表達(dá)我以上的意思，你會(huì)順著看到這里嗎?或者，我不能夠有效地表達(dá)自己的意思，能讓你學(xué)會(huì)這些東西嗎?語(yǔ)言的重要性是極高的。

如果只靠語(yǔ)言，那么你就不必刷題了，因?yàn)槟闳ケ骋黄Z(yǔ)言完美的文章，考試的時(shí)候直接默寫(xiě)下來(lái)就可以了。這顯然是不行的，再好的模板(好的句式)，你再好地去運(yùn)用，沒(méi)有合理的思維，雅思寫(xiě)作就是5.5分及以下。

兩條腿走路，思維和語(yǔ)言都很重要!

那么，如何能練出合理的雅思寫(xiě)作思維?

擴(kuò)大你的知識(shí)量

多看《網(wǎng)易公開(kāi)課》，尤其是里面的《TED》。《語(yǔ)言如何改變?nèi)祟悺?“27個(gè)盟國(guó)，說(shuō)著23種語(yǔ)言，你需要253人的翻譯隊(duì)伍”)如果你看過(guò)上面這個(gè)視頻，回答這個(gè)題目就會(huì)容易很多。

刷題

一起來(lái)看到這樣三個(gè)分論點(diǎn)：

1. 跨文化交流變得容易 2. 獲得資訊變得容易 3. 學(xué)習(xí)變得容易

其實(shí)這是有方法的。不過(guò)是把life分成了以上3個(gè)方面而已，這叫做分類法。多刷題，就會(huì)找到解題的各種套路!

2018年5月19日雅思寫(xiě)作真題高分范文

真題：People can eat a wide variety of food that can be grown in other areas. As a result, people eat more food produced in other regions than local food. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

雅思寫(xiě)作真題范文

Our diet is becoming more diversified than before, with a wider range of food transported from other regions and served on the dining table. Many people prefer this kind of food to locally produced food and this phenomenon has both positive and negative outcomes.

More choices in the daily diet indicate that people nowadays enjoy better quality of life. For instance, people in China can buy some bread and biscuits that are imported from foreign countries. Those who live in cold areas can try some fruits that are grown in the tropical area. Also, this明 encourage the trade between different regions, as any country or region can focus on the production of the local food and exchange it with others. As a result, the productivity increases significantly and people can buy high quality food at low prices.

However, this trend also has some negative effects, both on individuals and on society. Food produced locally is believed to be fresher than that transported a long distance from other regions. To extend the shelf life, preservatives are commonly used in food processing, posing a risk to people's health, as these additives usually contain harmful substances. In addition, the food of a region reflects its customs and cultures. If people follow the trend to eat the imported food, some local special food may diminish, which would be a loss of local food culture.

Overall, in a globalized era, we can expect more food produced in other areas to appear on local people's dining table. This can improve our living standard, but meanwhile there are some problems that should not be ignored. (269 words)

雅思寫(xiě)作7分范文：購(gòu)買(mǎi)進(jìn)口食品

本題是2016年8月13日的原題重現(xiàn)，與2017年5月13日的真題也基本相同。當(dāng)今是全球化時(shí)代，我們的日常生活中充滿了外來(lái)的元素，只不過(guò)我們很少去關(guān)注：我們穿的衣服，吃的食品，乘坐的汽車或者飛機(jī)，幾乎沒(méi)有什么東西沒(méi)有外來(lái)的痕跡。那么，在這個(gè)大背景下，我們?cè)撊绾斡懻摫敬窝潘紝?xiě)作話題呢?

關(guān)于食用更多外來(lái)食品，而不是本地食品，就如使用其他產(chǎn)品一樣，肯定是利弊參半。

好的地方，無(wú)非是豐富了我們的食物選擇，改善了我們的營(yíng)養(yǎng)結(jié)構(gòu)，這是從消費(fèi)者個(gè)人而言的。那么，對(duì)于整個(gè)食品產(chǎn)業(yè)，無(wú)疑會(huì)增加產(chǎn)業(yè)的競(jìng)爭(zhēng)，從而提升服務(wù)質(zhì)量，但是壞處也由此而產(chǎn)生：如果消費(fèi)者大量食用外來(lái)食品，這無(wú)疑會(huì)挫傷國(guó)內(nèi)食品產(chǎn)業(yè)的發(fā)展。

談及個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)，我們可以這樣認(rèn)為，雖然在短期內(nèi)國(guó)內(nèi)食品產(chǎn)業(yè)可能受損，但是從長(zhǎng)遠(yuǎn)看，競(jìng)爭(zhēng)導(dǎo)致提高，從而可以促進(jìn)國(guó)內(nèi)食品產(chǎn)業(yè)走向世界，因此反而變成一件好事，由此得出結(jié)論：消費(fèi)者食用外來(lái)食品，無(wú)論對(duì)個(gè)人還是對(duì)整個(gè)食品產(chǎn)業(yè)，都是一件好事。

雅思寫(xiě)作真題范文解析1

30 years ago, American fast food brands such as McDonald, KFC, and Subway were basically unheard of in China, but now they have become everyday words to Chinese people who have probably consumed the greatest amount of American fast food in the world. Though the introduction of food from other regions is not without negative effects, I do think it is positive to both the individual consumers and the food industryas a whole.

30年前，麥當(dāng)勞、肯德基和賽百味等美國(guó)快餐品牌在中國(guó)基本上是聞所未聞的，但現(xiàn)在它們已成為中國(guó)人的日常用語(yǔ)，中國(guó)人可能消費(fèi)了世界上最多的美國(guó)快餐。雖然從其他地區(qū)引進(jìn)食品并非沒(méi)有負(fù)面影響，但我認(rèn)為這對(duì)個(gè)體消費(fèi)者和整個(gè)食品行業(yè)都是積極的。

(1)開(kāi)頭段對(duì)題目所提的現(xiàn)象(即人們可以廣泛使用外來(lái)食品)進(jìn)行細(xì)化描寫(xiě)，引入話題，并提出自己的觀點(diǎn)。

(2)basically 基本上

(3)...is unheard of ......是聞所未聞

(4)consume 消費(fèi)

(5)...is not without... 不無(wú)......

(6)food industry 食品業(yè)

(7)as a whole 作為整體地

雅思寫(xiě)作真題范文解析2

With greater variety of food coming from outside, we can enjoy a better nutritional structure and greater freedom to choose our favorite food. Now we all know that eggplants and potatoes are vital to our health, but very few know they were originally grown in Mexico and Ireland and were not imported to China until after the 18th century. So the food from other regions has offered us more nutritional choices. Instead of just taking soy bean milk, many people today have cow milk; instead of just taking breads, many people now have sandwiches as well.

有了更多的來(lái)自外部的食物，我們可以享受更好的營(yíng)養(yǎng)結(jié)構(gòu)和更大的自由選擇我們最喜歡的食物?，F(xiàn)在我們都知道茄子和土豆對(duì)我們的健康非常重要，但很少有人知道，它們最初生長(zhǎng)在墨西哥和愛(ài)爾蘭，直到18世紀(jì)以后才被引進(jìn)到中國(guó)。所以來(lái)自其他地區(qū)的食物為我們提供了更多的營(yíng)養(yǎng)選擇。今天，許多人不只喝豆?jié){，還喝牛奶;不僅吃面包，還吃三明治。

(1)本段討論引進(jìn)外來(lái)食品對(duì)個(gè)體消費(fèi)者的好處：改進(jìn)營(yíng)養(yǎng)結(jié)構(gòu)，提供更多選擇。本段主要使用舉例法(包括茄子、土豆;豆?jié){，牛奶;面包，三明治)，圍繞的主題是來(lái)自其他地區(qū)的食品改善了我們的營(yíng)養(yǎng)結(jié)構(gòu)，并給我們更多選擇。

(2)variety 種類

(3)nutritional structure 營(yíng)養(yǎng)結(jié)構(gòu)

(4)vital 至關(guān)重要的

(5)originally 首先;起先

(6)not...until... 直到......才......

雅思寫(xiě)作真題解析3

Some may argue that the importation of foreign food may impair the local food industry. This may be true in some cases. We have seen many local food brands become obsolete when their foreign replacements are introduced to the market. However, I believe the intensified competition resulting from the arrival of the foreign food is beneficial to the long-term development of the local food industry, because it will compel the local food companies to improve the quality of their products, which in turn will make them more competitive in the global market.

有些人可能會(huì)說(shuō)，進(jìn)口外國(guó)食物可能會(huì)損害本地的食物業(yè)。這在某些情況下可能是正確的。我們已經(jīng)看到，當(dāng)外來(lái)的替代品被引入時(shí)，許多本地食品品牌消失了。然而，我相信，外來(lái)食品的到來(lái)所帶來(lái)的激烈競(jìng)爭(zhēng)，對(duì)本地食品工業(yè)的長(zhǎng)遠(yuǎn)發(fā)展是有利的，因?yàn)檫@將迫使當(dāng)?shù)厥称饭咎岣弋a(chǎn)品質(zhì)量，而這無(wú)疑將使它們?cè)谌蚴袌?chǎng)上更具競(jìng)爭(zhēng)力。

(1)本段討論引進(jìn)外來(lái)食品與本地食品業(yè)發(fā)展之間的關(guān)系。首先指出，外來(lái)食品的確可能損害本地食品業(yè)，然后轉(zhuǎn)折過(guò)來(lái)，說(shuō)明外來(lái)食品帶來(lái)的競(jìng)爭(zhēng)迫使本地企業(yè)提升質(zhì)量，而這個(gè)從長(zhǎng)遠(yuǎn)看會(huì)提升其在全球市場(chǎng)上的競(jìng)爭(zhēng)力。

(2)impair損害;傷害

(3)in some cases 在某些情況下

(4)obsolete過(guò)時(shí)的

(5)replacement替換品

(6)intensified加劇的

(7)result from 由......引起

(8)long-term長(zhǎng)遠(yuǎn)的

(9)compel 迫使

(10)in turn 反過(guò)來(lái)

(11)competitive 有競(jìng)爭(zhēng)力的

(12)global market 全球市場(chǎng)

雅思寫(xiě)作真題解析4

Thus, that people are able to consume more and more food from other countries and regions gives a favorable opportunity to both the individual consumers and the entire food industry. It is, therefore, advisable for us to embrace this development, rather than rejecting it.

因此，人們能夠消費(fèi)越來(lái)越多的來(lái)自其他國(guó)家和地區(qū)的食品，為個(gè)人消費(fèi)者和整個(gè)食品行業(yè)提供了一個(gè)有利的機(jī)會(huì)。因此，我們最好接受這一發(fā)展，而不是拒絕它。

(1)本段為結(jié)論段，重申觀點(diǎn)。好的結(jié)尾段應(yīng)該包括兩個(gè)內(nèi)容：一是對(duì)前文的總結(jié)，二是適當(dāng)?shù)难由?。因此，好作文的結(jié)尾段通常都是兩句話組成。

(2)favorable有利的

(3)advisable明智的

(4)embrace擁抱;歡迎

(5)reject 拒絕

雅思大作文范文：進(jìn)口食品VS本土食品

真題：In many countries, people like to eat a variety of food that are produced in other regions than the food grown in local areas. As a result, people eat more food produced in other regions than local food. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

雅思大作文段落結(jié)構(gòu)：

P1：引入話題+表明觀點(diǎn)(部分否定觀點(diǎn))

P2：指出此做法的的優(yōu)勢(shì)：可以給當(dāng)?shù)靥峁└嗟木蜆I(yè)崗位;

P3：指出此做法的弊端：對(duì)人們的健康有害;

P4：指出此做法的弊端：對(duì)當(dāng)?shù)亟?jīng)濟(jì)有負(fù)面影響。

P5：總結(jié)：概括文章內(nèi)容和重申觀點(diǎn)。

雅思大作文真題范文

Even though locally grown foods are both fresher and seasonal, people in today’s world seem to be reluctant to consume them but prefer imported food. However, benefiting the local job market, this does poses far more potential risks to people themselves and the community in which they live.

The more consumption of food imported from other places could create more job opportunities locally. The more demand for imported foods , the more workers will be in need. This is mainly because this demand opens up a new market where different employees have to serve consumers from transporting these foods to selling them to people. As a result, there will be a great deal more unfilled job vacancies and the unemployed could then find a well-paid job.

However, people’s preference of food imported from other places will take a heavy toll on their overall health in the long term. It is well known that the refresher the food is, the healthier it is for people’s health. Compared with locally grown food, the imported counterparts from far-away states and countries have to be added some special chemical ingredients to keep them from being rotten as it has to be travelled long distance and to stay in the distribution enters before reaching consumers. In this case, the imported food may not be full of flavor and be detrimental to people’s health, especially for the older and the children alike.

Consuming more imported foods rather than local food inflicts serious damage to the local economy. If a vast majority of local residents buy and eat more food produced in other areas, some of them will be deprived of work, the only source of family income, and therefore this high unemployment will also undermine the local economy. What’s worse, this consumption pattern will unfortunately end up handling over the earnings to a corporation in another city, state or country to help them boost their economy, instead of to the local economy.

In conclusion, while proving people with more job choices, this preference of imported food is dangerous to people’s health as well as local economy.(336 words)

雅思寫(xiě)作高分表達(dá)

Pose potential risks to 對(duì)...構(gòu)成威脅

this is mainly because 這主要是因?yàn)?/p>

Job vacancies 職位空缺

Find a well-paid job 找一份高薪工作

Take a heavy toll on 對(duì)...有負(fù)面影響

Locally grown food 當(dāng)?shù)厥澄?/p>

rotten 變質(zhì)的

Be deprived of 剝奪

Inflict serious damage on 使承受(不好的事物)

undermine 逐漸削弱

Both fresher and seasonal 平行結(jié)構(gòu)