微笑，恰如淌過的溪流，柔和恬靜；微笑，恰似那懸掛的一刀新月，皎潔光亮；微笑，又恰似那挺拔的蒼松，積蓄著萬般力量……

Smile, just like the flowing stream, soft and quiet; smile, just like the new moon hanging, bringing light; smile, just like the tall pine, accumulating all kinds of strength

如果說，有一種力量可以讓人堅韌不拔，那便是微笑的力量；如果說，有一種力量可以讓人自信滿滿，那便是微笑的力量；如果說，有一種力量可以讓人心頭一暖，那便是微笑的力量！

If there is a power that can make people persevere, it is the power of smile; if there is a power that can make people confident, it is the power of smile; if there is a power that can make people warm, it is the power of smile!

那次天崩地裂，那次地動山搖，高樓大廈瞬間成為一片瓦礫，多少生命在廢墟下呼喚求助。當解放軍戰(zhàn)士將一個小男孩成功托起，放入單架時，他輕輕地一笑，用滿是灰塵的右手向戰(zhàn)士們敬禮！這是一個孩子的微笑，也是災(zāi)區(qū)人民對未來充滿希望的一笑。它傳達了太多：樂觀堅強地活著，感謝所有關(guān)心災(zāi)區(qū)的朋友們，我很好！

That time, the earth broke, that time, high-rise buildings suddenly became a piece of rubble, how many lives called for help under the ruins. When the PLA soldiers successfully lifted a little boy into a single frame, he smiled softly and saluted the soldiers with his dusty right hand! This is a child's smile, but also a smile of hope for the future of the people in the disaster area. It conveys too much: optimistic and strong to live, thank all the friends who care about the disaster area, I am very good!

也許小男孩不曾想到很多，他只知道，每天都是陽光的，而微笑，是給自己最好的犒賞。

Maybe the little boy didn't think of much, he only knew that every day is sunny, and smile is the best reward for himself.

我們喜歡微笑，喜歡嘴角的翹起，喜歡那彎起的弧度，更喜歡它所傳達的一種力量。

We like to smile, like the corner of the mouth, like the curved arc, more like the power it conveys.

奧運會的志愿者們，無論在何種場合，面對何種膚色、國籍的人，總是報以微笑。這不僅展現(xiàn)了一個大國的風采，更展現(xiàn)出了中華民族包容的姿態(tài)。它在向全世界傳遞著一種力量，一種海納百川、擁抱世界的力量！

Olympic volunteers, no matter what occasion, face what color, nationality, always smile. This shows not only the style of a big country, but also the inclusive attitude of the Chinese nation. It is transmitting a kind of power to the whole world, a kind of power that embraces all rivers and embraces the world!

而那2008張源自世界各地的笑臉，同樣傳達出微笑不可抗拒的力量。

And the 2008 smiling faces from all over the world also convey the irresistible power of smile.

不需要李白“仰天長笑出門去，我輩豈是蓬蒿人”的大笑；不需要“我自橫刀向天笑，去留肝膽兩昆侖”的充滿血腥的狂笑；也不需要“一騎紅塵妃子笑，無人知是荔枝來”的紅顏一笑……這些笑，或太狂放不羈，或太剛烈頑強，抑或充滿嫵媚。而我們需要的，不過是淺淺的會心一笑。

There is no need for Li Bai's laughter of "go out with a long smile, my generation is not a Penghao man"; there is no need for me to laugh from the horizontal knife to the sky, to keep the two Kunlun Mountains of liver and gall "; there is no need for a smile of" ride the red lady, no one knows it's litchi " These laughs are either too wild, too strong, or full of charm. What we need is a smile.

人們很容易記住溫總理那慈祥的笑容，那是自信滿滿的他發(fā)自肺腑的微笑。面對金融危機，從容不迫，面對外國記者的犀利問題，他依舊笑對。他正如一代儒者，溫文爾雅地處世待人。他的微笑，不也是一種力量嗎？這是笑對人生的一種力量！

It's easy for people to remember Premier Wen's kind smile. It's a confident smile from his heart. In the face of the financial crisis, leisurely, in the face of the sharp problems of foreign journalists, he still smiled right. Like a generation of Confucians, he is gentle in his life. Isn't his smile also a power? This is a power of laughter to life!

微笑，正如同一支支高擎的火炬，在全世界，在湛藍的天空下，一直傳遞著……

Smile, just like the same torch, in the whole world, under the blue sky, has been passing

當人們幫助了困境中的你，你的微笑是感激，是滿懷深情的力量；當別人不小心踩到你，你的微笑便是寬容大度的力量；當厄運侵襲了你，而你卻報以微笑時，微笑便成了堅強勇敢的力量！

When people help you in a difficult situation, your smile is a grateful and affectionate power; when others step on you carelessly, your smile is a power of tolerance and magnanimity; when misfortune strikes you and you smile back, your smile becomes a strong and brave power!

如果全世界都充滿愛，充滿微笑，將不再會有伊拉克戰(zhàn)爭、巴以沖突以及朝核問題。我們，作為新世紀的主人，將肩負著歷史賦予我們的責任，那就是將微笑作為一種力量傳遞到世界的每個角落……

If the whole world is full of love and smile, there will be no more Iraq war, Palestinian Israeli conflict and North Korean nuclear issue. We, as the masters of the new century, will shoulder the responsibility entrusted to us by history, that is, to transmit smile as a power to every corner of the world

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本文寫作的著力點（“微笑”）集中，表達“微笑”能夠傳遞一種力量的人生感悟。

This paper focuses on the focus of writing ("smile") to express that "smile" can convey a power of life perception.

文章開頭兩段用六個排比句簡潔有力地點明觀點———“微笑也是一種力量”；接著列舉了汶川地震中小男孩樂觀堅強的微笑、2008年奧運會志愿者擁抱世界的微笑、溫總理慈祥從容的微笑，以此來表現(xiàn)微笑的力量，其中又通過對比，突出不同于狂放不羈、剛烈頑強、嫵媚動人的“會心一笑”的價值與意義，從而深化了文章的中心。

In the first two paragraphs of the article, six lines of comparison are used to point out the viewpoint succinctly and powerfully - "smile is also a kind of power"; then, the optimistic and strong smile of small and medium-sized boys in Wenchuan earthquake, the smile of 2008 Olympic Games volunteers embracing the world, and the gentle and calm smile of Premier Wen are cited to show the power of smile. In addition, through comparison, they are different from unrestrained, strong and tenacious The value and significance of the charming "knowing and laughing" deepen the center of the article.

全文開合有度，論證有力，語言流暢。

The full text is open and close to a certain extent, with strong argument and fluent language.