托福寫作的獨(dú)立部分對考生的寫作內(nèi)容重視程度上超過詞句運(yùn)用，因此許多文章寫得很漂亮的同學(xué)拿不到高分很多時(shí)候其實(shí)都是因?yàn)閮?nèi)容方面存在問題,下面小編就和大家分享托福獨(dú)立寫作高分要點(diǎn)解讀，來欣賞一下吧。

托福獨(dú)立寫作高分要點(diǎn)解讀 說清楚邏輯關(guān)系很重要

托福獨(dú)立寫作為什么邏輯容易扣分?

很多人都覺得奇怪，為什么托福獨(dú)立寫作部分邏輯容易出錯(cuò)扣分呢?其實(shí)原因很簡單，邏輯是個(gè)思維層面上的東西，而中國考生和老外出題者，在思維模式上對不上電波其實(shí)并不少見。

很多同學(xué)習(xí)慣了寫中文文章較為含蓄或者話里有話的思路，而老外考官其實(shí)并沒有義務(wù)去猜測你的想法，這種思維上的差異就會導(dǎo)致考生自以為已經(jīng)表達(dá)清楚的邏輯，其實(shí)老外考官根本就沒有GET到點(diǎn)，反而覺得考生沒把邏輯關(guān)系寫清楚。再加上托福寫作中電腦部分的e-rater評分也并不從內(nèi)容邏輯角度來給分，這就造成了中國考生很容易在邏輯中因?yàn)闆]把話說清楚而被扣分了。

實(shí)例講解托福獨(dú)立寫作的邏輯扣分

上面說了一些理論大家可能還沒完全理解，下面小編舉一個(gè)來自小站托福寫作學(xué)員的真實(shí)案例給大家分析一下：

學(xué)生習(xí)作節(jié)選

When one student pay his all attention to the professor, he can find the mistakes. And during the process of the discussion with the professor, students can learn a lot of new knowledge.

邏輯問題分析

這篇獨(dú)立寫作的題目是討論大學(xué)教育中學(xué)生和教授的關(guān)系。而這位同學(xué)寫的文章其實(shí)詞匯語法句式方面都還好，但偏偏就是邏輯問題太多。大家來看這段節(jié)選的句子，邏輯上的錯(cuò)誤多到別說是老外，就連同為中國人的小編都忍不了的地步。

為什么學(xué)生認(rèn)真聽講就能找到錯(cuò)誤?找到的到底是什么錯(cuò)誤誰的錯(cuò)誤?是老師講課犯的錯(cuò)誤還是學(xué)生自己的理解錯(cuò)誤?然后找到錯(cuò)誤和后面討論之間又是什么關(guān)系，兩個(gè)沒有明顯邏輯聯(lián)系的句子怎么就給連著寫了出來?

像這樣塞滿了邏輯問題的句子，就好像“元芳你怎么看?”“我用眼睛看?！币粯拥臒o厘頭對答一樣，考官既看不懂更沒有義務(wù)和心思去猜你的行文邏輯，很可能直接一個(gè)邏輯部分不合格的評分就甩了出來，你的作文得分就這么掉了下來。

如何改善托福獨(dú)立寫作的邏輯論述?

那么，假如考生在托福獨(dú)立寫作中存在上述的論述邏輯問題，要怎么樣才能及時(shí)發(fā)現(xiàn)和改正過來呢?

1. 先列提綱再寫文章

寫作文之前列提綱是很好的習(xí)慣，但很多同學(xué)嫌麻煩或是為了節(jié)省時(shí)間都會跳過這個(gè)步驟，然而邏輯問題往往就是因?yàn)榇蠹覜]列提綱理清楚寫作思路所產(chǎn)生的。因此，小編希望大家在撰寫?yīng)毩懽鞯奈恼聲r(shí)，還是能夠先把提綱給列好，至少整篇文章的觀點(diǎn)，分論點(diǎn)，支持論據(jù)這些要先想清楚并且寫在草稿上，至于具體的詞匯語法句式則可以邊寫邊加入。這么做既能避免文章跑題，在邏輯論述上也能更有條理，有效避免邏輯錯(cuò)誤。

2. 找別人看文章

想要改善邏輯問題，那么考生需要先能夠發(fā)現(xiàn)問題才行。然而實(shí)際上大家想要找到自己平時(shí)寫作文時(shí)存在的邏輯漏洞卻并非易事。之所以邏輯問題不容易發(fā)現(xiàn)，原因在于考生自己往往是很難看出自身思維上的邏輯錯(cuò)誤的。本來就是按照自己的想法思維來寫的，大家理所當(dāng)然地會覺得別人也能看懂，發(fā)現(xiàn)不了問題實(shí)屬正常。而既然自己發(fā)現(xiàn)不了，那么最好的做法當(dāng)然是找別人來看了。

有條件的考生可以直接找托福寫作方面的老師或者擅長英語寫作的朋友來替你看文章，沒有條件的也可以嘗試通過托福考試群等在線方式找人來看自己的作文?？次恼碌囊蟛恍枰芨?，只要讓別人看看有沒有邏輯上的問題。也許你發(fā)現(xiàn)不了的邏輯錯(cuò)誤別人一眼就能看出來。通過這種方式來尋找自身作文的邏輯問題并加以改善，也是相當(dāng)不錯(cuò)的做法。

3. 用好邏輯關(guān)系詞

最后一個(gè)提升寫作邏輯的做法就是用好邏輯關(guān)系詞。托福寫作中的邏輯關(guān)系很多，并列、因果、轉(zhuǎn)折、遞進(jìn)、讓步等等，各有各的對應(yīng)邏輯關(guān)系詞，小編在這里給大家留個(gè)作業(yè)，希望各位同學(xué)自己去把常用的表示各類邏輯關(guān)系的詞匯分門別類的歸納匯總起來，然后嘗試在自己的文章中用好這些關(guān)系詞。這就好比給本來昏暗的房子里裝上了照明燈一樣，不僅自己能把邏輯關(guān)系展現(xiàn)出來，也能讓考官看得更明白。

托福寫作：題庫范文附思路解析

1. Is there anything that young people can teach older people? Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? There is nothing that young people can teach older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

『分析』不能同意。nothing是一個(gè)絕對修飾詞。確實(shí)，大多數(shù)情況下，年齡大一些的人有更多的經(jīng)驗(yàn)，年輕人要向他們學(xué)習(xí)。舉例。然而，年齡大不一定等于懂得多。有很多時(shí)候哪怕很小的孩子也可以教我們很多東西。舉例。

『范文』 It has been a common conception that young people have nothing of value to teach their elders I firmly disagree with this statement, and posit that in fact, the opposite is true. Young people have a plethora of information to teach old people. One of the advantages of being young is having a different perspective on life than one's seniors. Young people have not been influenced by nearly as many people as an old person, and therefore, their thoughts and ideas are more their own. An older person can learn from these new ideas, and once again, see the world with the freshness and fascination of a young person. Also, young people tend to embark on all of their projects with a kind of intensity and perseverance. This quality can sometimes be lost as one gets older. After spending time with a young person, an old person tends to gain back some of this vitality. For example, I have seen many older people who did not live their lives to the fullest. However, with the addition of a grand-daughter or a grandson, they regained much of their youthfulness. In my opinion, this was fully due to their seeing the vitality in the young, and learning from it. Finally, young people tend to enjoy experimenting when they are working on a project. Older people are usually set in their ways, and will continue doing a chore one way, even if it is not the best way. Young people can offer insight into new methods of doing even the simplest tasks and often will think up new systems that do not occur to the elderly. In conclusion, I think older people can learn much from the future generations. Of course, this is not to say that young people cannot learn from their elders. The educational process does not only work one way through generation gaps.

2. Is reading fiction more enjoyable than watching movies? Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Reading fiction (such as novels and short stories) is more enjoyable than watching movies. Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.

『分析』同意或者不同意都是偏頗的，所以，要看情況。要看是小說的類型，電影創(chuàng)作的質(zhì)量。 ? 讀小說特有的好處：閱讀時(shí)間安排上自由;有足夠的想象空間;文字的美感不可替代 ? 看電影特有的好處：聲像(combination of sound and image)結(jié)合帶來獨(dú)特的效果;往往濃縮在150分鐘之內(nèi);優(yōu)秀演員的演繹(the ability to create empathy)帶來不同的理解(interpretation)。 ? 有些東西是電影拍不出來的; ? 有些東西是小說寫不出來的所以，哪一個(gè)更好，不能一概而論。各有各的好處。

『范文』 Billions of dollars are spent on entertainment every year, in every country in the world. Much of this money is spent on either movies or fictional books, as these two types of entertainment are found to be most enjoyable by the masses. Which, however, is more enjoyable? I posit that these mediums cannot be compared so easily, as they both have their strong points in regards to entertainment. When one reads a fictional book, one is able to let his/her imagination run wild. Everything from the setting to the character descriptions is left up to the reader's mind, and therefore can be quite enjoyable. Depending on the novel, of course, one can imagine far away places just by the description read in the novel. Books are also an excellent form of entertainment as they are portable. If one is on a long commute to work, which is common in Beijing, one can bring along a favorite novel, effectively taking his/her entertainment with him/her. Books can be enjoyed in any setting. They can be picked up on a whim, and put down again to return to at a later time. Movies, of course, also have their own benefits. Movies allow the viewer to be completely engrossed in the plot. There is no need for thinking, as everything is presented to you in a straightforward form. One never has to ponder what a place or a person looks like; the information is all accessible to the viewer. This can be an advantage or a disadvantage, depending on what one is looking for in his/her entertainment. In a society where we want everything faster, better and more exciting, perhaps movies are a more relevant medium. However, movies demand at least an hour and a half of one's time. Books are available to their consumers whenever there is time, which is also an important feature. In conclusion, I believe that neither books nor movies are a more enjoyable form of entertainment. In some cases, I prefer to read a book. In others, a movie is vastly more enjoyable. It is up to the consumer to decide.

3. Should we spend all school day studying or set aside some time for exercising? Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. Other people believe that students should spend the whole school day on academic studies. Which opinion do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

『分析』同意前者更容易寫一些。 ? 身體健康對每個(gè)人都很重要，并且是學(xué)習(xí)進(jìn)步的前提 ? 體育訓(xùn)練可以使學(xué)生學(xué)到很多東西，比如團(tuán)隊(duì)精神 ? 合理的課程設(shè)置是學(xué)校的責(zé)任，學(xué)校應(yīng)該想辦法保證學(xué)生的健康

『范文』 Some people believe that it is important to have physical activities as part of a child's everyday curriculum at school. Others disagree, and argue that students should spend all of their time on academic studies. Personally, I believe that physical education is a vital part of an education as it teaches children to take care of their bodies, how to work as a team, and gives them a method of releasing tension and aggression. Humans have always known about the importance of taking care of our bodies, but it seems that in recent years, we have gradually forgotten this important fact. It is absolutely necessary to get some physical activity at least a few times a week, and engraining this idea into children when they are young is the best way to ensure their health for life. Physical exercise usually involves teamwork of some sort. Much of the exercise that young people get involves games such as basketball, volleyball, or football. All of these sports teach children how to work together to achieve a common goal, in this case, winning. I also believe that allowing the children to work together in a fun environment, rather than only on academic projects, brings a stronger sense of camaraderie, which helps the children to have healthy relationships with others. Finally, physical exercise is an excellent way to release tension and aggression. If one is particularly stressed about school or life, getting exercise can help the person to relax. As for letting out aggression, it is much healthier to kick a football than it is to hit someone who has made you angry. Exercise should definitely be a part of a student's education. Exercise has much more to offer than simply getting "a break" from academics. Physical exercise can balance out a student's hectic life, and make it much more pleasurable.

4. A center for business research or for research in agriculture? A university plans to develop a new research center in your country. Some people want a center for business research. Other people want a center for research in agriculture (farming). Which of these two kinds of research centers do you recommend for your country? Use specific reasons in your recommendation.

『分析』 ? 陳述開展商業(yè)研究的必要性 ? 陳述開展同業(yè)研究的必要性 ? 根據(jù)我國情況，建議偏重農(nóng)業(yè)技術(shù)研究，同時(shí)加強(qiáng)市場的調(diào)控

『范文』 China is currently one of the fastest growing economies in the world. A new research center whether business or agriculturally based, would be beneficial for both our country and the rest of the world. When considering if it would be more valuable to build a business center or an agricultural center, one must realize that both fields of research work hand in hand with each other to develop and expand a country's economy. In a bustling economy like China's, either research center would have great value. There is no doubt that a country's economy is strongly influenced by its ability to not only feed its own people, but also to export agricultural products to other countries. In this sense, an agricultural research center would help further development in China's sustainability and further the country on a global scale. An agricultural research center would also be a great idea in China, as our country already has excellent agricultural techniques. By having this type of research center in China, the world's knowledge on this important field would grow exponentially. Agriculture also has the ability to employ a large percentage of the population, and through agricultural research, these people's efforts could be used in a more efficient manner. A business research center would also be an excellent idea in China. As China becomes more and more prone to the power of globalization, a business research center would allow China to not only keep up with the business-minded West, but also, this type of center could possibly allow our country to surpass the West in new business ideas. China has the largest population in the world, and therefore, the business industry is bound to grow at an alarmingly fast rate. In conclusion, I believe that either of these centers would be beneficial to our country. Perhaps the best solution would be to raise funds for both of the centers, and allow the two centers to work together to build a better China.

5. The advantages and disadvantages of young children spending much time practicing sports Some young children spend a great amount of their time practicing sports. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

『分析』優(yōu)點(diǎn)：對身體健康有好處;有助于培養(yǎng)與人和睦相處的能力;缺點(diǎn)：耽誤學(xué)習(xí)，instant pleasure costs long-term benefits.

『范文』 It is a common activity not only in China, but across the world, for young children to spend copious amounts of time playing and practicing sports. There is much discussion as to whether this is a beneficial way for young people to spend their time. In order to decide, we must consider the advantages and disadvantages. There are many advantages to children spending their time playing sports. First, children will be stronger and healthier because they are getting exercise. This not only has the immediate effects of being healthy children, but also affects their health later in life, as they will develop good habits for taking care of their physical shape and their health. Second, exercise is known to be an excellent appetite and weight controller. In recent years, with the further development of China, many young people are becoming overweight. Playing sports in one 's childhood could definitely help this situation. Finally, sports are excellent social activities. If one plays sports early in life, he will learn about teamwork, perseverance, and goal setting. All of these lessons will help one to become a happier, better adjusted adult. There are also a few disadvantages to children spending time playing sports. For example, playing sports detracts from study time, which is very important. If children are playing sports so often that they cannot concentrate on their studies, they should definitely stop. Another disadvantage is that sports can sometimes be dangerous, causing life-long injuries to a person that is not careful. Finally, some people believe that sports are overly competitive, and push children too hard at a young age. It is possible that children would lose self-confidence and self-esteem if they constantly lost at sports. Sometimes, it is the parents that push the children too hard at sports, causing an unwillingness to participate due to a lack of enjoyment. Overall, I think that sports are beneficial to a young person's life. They offer valuable skills that will be useful throughout one's entire life. As long as one is careful and does not overdo it, sports are an excellent idea for all young children.